Formal+Writing+exemplar


 * 1.2 Produce Formal Writing: Excellence exemplar**

Aotearoa is fast becoming an unhealthy nation due to the amount of television being watched. The damaging noise levels some elder persons listen to the television, the people portrayed on the television and false or misleading advertising, are all contributing to New Zealands level of health steadily decreasing.

New Zealand Hearing Association has recently declared that, children under the age of ten are becoming more prone to deafness, due to the noise level of their surroundings. The average ten year old can cope up to ninety decibels of sound, before real damage is caused to the hearing. On the average television this is at approximately at volume fifteen. There is a television in more than one third of households in New Zealand, and of those about one half is lower than the ninety decibel limit. Hearing a programme that much louder isn’t going to make it that much better considering the children of New Zealand’s hearing is at stake due to the television.

Underweight models, actresses and stars are a common occurance on the television today. Is it any wonder the New Zealand trend to be underweight or anorexic is increasing every year? The television and media are the main cause and inspiration to those who are insecure about their weight to become so, as they are reaching for a dream of being as ‘happy’ and ‘rich’ as some off the celebrities, such as Nicole Richie.

McDonald’s is one of the biggest advertisers in the world spending over $1.4 billion a year on advertising, generally aiming at children. The television is the main source of their expenditure, on television commercials aimed at getting children to want to eat McDonald’s food. With unhealthy food commercials aimed at children of New Zealand, the childhood obesity rate has suddenly climbed. Also, obesity is now the second biggest preventable disease, leading to death, in the world, next to smoking. It is said to become first in 2010. New Zealand is subjected to commercials of an unhealthy nature everyday and should not suffer them any longer considering the damage they do.

Television is commonly known as an educational device, used in some schools and at home to teach children the values of life, through screenplay. Films like ‘Titanic’, ‘Monster’s Inc.’ and ‘Dead Poet’s Society’ all teach values such as courage, love and humour while film like ‘The Terminator’, ‘NARC’ and ‘Blade’ show the importance of not doing drugs, playing with guns and talking to strangers. On television education can be an enjoyable experience compared to taking notes, but in too large amounts, television can corrupt the brain and teach the opposite skills such as ‘Save the Last Dance’, that being a gangster, on the streets, protecting your ‘corener’ would be fun.

Consequently, the television is bad for the health of New Zealand, due to it’s misuse and creating fake situations into a reality. It manipulates the mind, making the veiwer consider their values abnormal in the face of the onslaught of misleading guidelines such as to be rich you must be thin.

Please note that this has been typed with the errors left in. It has well thought out ideas, few minor lapses in technical accuracy and a convincing style. The student has maintained a high level of formality throughout.